Top Notch Prompt Response Advice




Dear VCE 'Encountering Conflict' students,

This is a space for you to practise different forms of writing and responding to set prompts. When you write a piece you will need to indicate whether you are using The Secret River or The Rugmaker to inform your writing. You also need to provide a mini statement of explanation that outlines form, audience, purpose and context.

You will also be expected to read each others' work and use the comments feature and DIIGO (a web tool useful for conferencing) to provide feedback to each other. When conferencing you can comment about what is working well in the piece, areas for improvement and how you can see the prompt and nominated text influencing the piece. Due to this you might need to edit a post you have submitted so label each edit as post 1, post 2, etc.

DIIGO: A COLLABORATIVE WEB TOOL THAT CAN BE USED FOR CONFERENCING EACH OTHERS' WRITING

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Tuesday, October 20, 2009

One conflict always contains the seeds of another

General Opinions/Ideas

- One conflict can contain other types of conflict within it.

-A conflict may contain one seed of other conflict but others may contain many of them.

For the prompt

- A war is a massive conflict in itself, however inside the war is the conflict of the different ranks and the individual men and woman in the war. A war may have started due to two world leaders fighting amongst themselves. This fight may have then escalated to a major war between the countries.

Against the Prompt

- Not all conflicts contain the seeds of another. Some conflicts may occur spontaneously due to an event that happened at that moment in time. For example, two best friends may have a fight due to something stupid one of them said to the other.

Three possible writing responses to the prompt

-A news article on the conflict about using nuclear power. This topic is a major issue in today's society. This conflict contains many seeds of other conflicts, such as the conflict that surrounds the accidents that happened at Chernobyl and Three Mile Island. Another seed of conflict that is within this issue is the cost and time that is needed to build a successful nuclear power plant. The target audience for this piece is young adults, adults and elderly people within society.

-An imaginative story that features conflicts that surround war and the effects it has on the individuals involved. The story could be a diary entry from a soldier in the war. By speaking through the voice of a war beaten soldier, the audience will be able understand and get that point that is trying to be conveyed. The target audience for this writing piece could be anyone from a Year 10 range to elderly.

-An expository piece on how conflict is a major part of everyday life and how many conflicts throughout our lives stem from previous conflicts in our lifetime. The target audience for this piece could be teenages through to elderly cizitens.

By Amanda Johnson and Sarah Cox =)

One conflict always contains the seeds of another

General Opinions/Ideas

- One conflict can contain other types of conflict within it.

-A conflict may contain one seed of other conflict but others may contain many of them.

For the prompt

- A war is a massive conflict in itself, however inside the war is the conflict of the different ranks and the individual men and woman in the war. A war may have started due to two world leaders fighting amongst themselves. This fight may have then escalated to a major war between the countries.

Against the Prompt

- Not all conflicts contain the seeds of another. Some conflicts may occur spontaneously due to an event that happened at that moment in time. For example, two best friends may have a fight due to something stupid one of them said to the other.

Three possible writing responses to the prompt

-A news article on the conflict about using nuclear power. This topic is a major issue in today's society. This conflict contains many seeds of other conflicts, such as the conflict that surrounds the accidents that happened at Chernobyl and Three Mile Island. Another seed of conflict that is within this issue is the cost and time that is needed to build a successful nuclear power plant. The target audience for this piece is young adults, adults and elderly people within society.

-An imaginative story that features conflicts that surround war and the effects it has on the individuals involved. The story could be a diary entry from a soldier in the war. By speaking through the voice of a war beaten soldier, the audience will be able understand and get that point that is trying to be conveyed. The target audience for this writing piece could be anyone from a Year 10 range to elderly.

-An expository piece on how conflict is a major part of everyday life and how many conflicts throughout our lives stem from previous conflicts in our lifetime. The target audience for this piece could be teenages through to elderly cizitens.

By Amanda Johnson and Sarah Cox =)

conflict can reveal unexpected qualities in an individual

*Thornhill, unexpectedly became a different man because he understood the aboriginals better

*disagree with this, thornhill wasn’t very accepting of the aboriginals, and was too caught up in his own self worth to even let his son make friends with the aboriginals. I don’t think it brought out any hidden qualities in thornhill at all. On the other hand, unexpected qualities were brought out in Blackwood because he stuck up for the aboriginal people through thick and thin, and took a lot of criticism and conflict in order to stick up for them.

*In ‘The Line” Weary Dunlop showed bravery against the Japanese people. Weary Dunlop was beaten for over eight hours, and made to kneel on hard rocks. Despite this he still did his best to help people and cure the sick men everyday, and saved the lives of so many people with very limited recourses.

For our writing ideas that would work for this prompt are:

this could make a good part of an explositary essay for this piece:

*In the bushfires that happened at the start of this year in Marysville. Many qualities were brought out of so many people, from helping fighting fires, to donating money and donating clothes and goods etc. One story that I heard recently that happened around the time of the bushfires was probably one of the most amazing things I have heard come from any person. My sisters friend, a volunteer firefighter, Luke, met another fireman in his travels with the bushfires. On there way to fighting a fire they found someones house burning up into flames. They found that there were people inside the house and together they saved the whole family from dying in the fire. When they got back from fighting the fires, the fire fighters realised that his house was burnt down, and his whole family was inside that house. He thought to himself that if he knew he could have tried to save his own family. Luke, my sisters friend, also a photographer took pictures of the fires and the guy that lost his family, and wrote a short story about him, and entered it in a competition. He won a $1200 holiday, and gave it to the man that lost his family. That man then went to Germany to see other family members. I think that was a beautiful thing to do, and clearly brings out qualities in human beings.

*With the tsunami in Samoa, many people donated lots of money and time to help get the country up and running again.

*World vision and other non-government organisations provide lots of help to third world countries to try and improve the health status of the popultion. they are doing there best to provide them with sanitation, food and immunisations, they are also trying to build schools and things to improve illiteracy in many countries. although this is not the result of a conflict, it could help prevent internal conflict and lots of pain and suffering due to bad ill health and disability adjusted life years. This may also prevent conflict within the family.

Some conflicts have a history that makes them impossible to resolve.

Some conflicts have a history that makes them impossible to resolve.

Against.

“All conflicts have some way in which they can be resolved. It just involves forgiveness and a willingness to understand different opinions.”


For.

“Conflict like with Jews. Aboriginals ect, seem impossible to resolve as so many people are involved and its continued over life times.”

“Conflicts can become a habit.”

“ The ‘he hates him, so I’ll hate him too’ idea seems to make conflict impossible to resolve as even if the reason for the conflict passes, people still hold grudges.”


General.


“Everything can be resolved.”

“History had nothing to do with it.”

“Religion wont be solved because believers are ignorant & brain washed.”


Three writing ideas that would work for this prompt are:

imaginative piece - a war story, which would be drawing from the secret river linking the conflict between the aboriginals and the white people. The masacar sceen would be like the setting. The feelings between everyone involved would be so hurt that they might find them impossible to resolve.


newspaper article - opinion piece, using the apology speech givin to the aboriginal people by Kevin Rudd could be used. by the speech being said it could possibly help people to get over it and move on.


expository essay- you could easily write your own essay on it you point of view reguarding the prompt and put your own ideas in it and experiences.




by caitlyn

Sometimes we meed to close our eyes and minds to reality if we want to avoid conflict.

Positive:
:in generals die in bed, the solders have to close their eyes and minds to reality to avoid conflict that can occur within the ranks. to avoid fighting amongst themselves, the men tell stories of their home life to remind them of where they are from and to step away from the reality or war.

Negative:
:closing our eyes and minds to reality doesn't always avoid conflict an example of this is, in look both was Meryl uses her imagination (cartoons) to escape reality to film a a world where she know a the out comes which is always is death, but this also causes her internal conflict between herself and death.
Conflict can create a legacy of tragedy
Conflict transfers between generations
Conflict started the war
Conflict started fights between the white people and black people, which led to a legacy that continues today
Like the conflict between black people and white people, white having black's as slave still effects currect black people today
War can create tension in relationships we see this in 'The Line' where Martin and Arch can't communicate effectively, and there are boundaries in their communication because of Arch's experiences of war

conflict is often the result of miscommunication

CONFLICT IS OFTEN THE RESULT OF MISCOMMUNICATION

General
  • Racial tention, blacks/whites has no common language (no way of communicating).

Positive
  • Not always the result of miscommunication, can be deliberate actions.
  • Miscommunication leadas to differing views of stuff
  • In world war 1, the Germans and the English speaking people could not communicate, resulting in fighting and death.
  • Alex is not able to communicate his ideas with me, and it is causing me to get frustrated. He cannot respond to basic topics which is annoying and causing us to argue because we cant communicate properly.

Negative

  • Asians/Triads
  • They took our jobs (no communication)
  • Look ugly/same (need to communicate what they are wearing etc to avoid conflict)

conflict can create a legacy of tragedy

positve:
in "look both ways"then train driver's internal conflict brings out unexpected qualities in his son. his son goes from withdran to becoming more caring and there for his father.

lbw illustrates how internal conflict can create unexpected qualities, as nick's internal struggle eventually leads to him overcoming it and becoming a stronger person.

negative:
in general dies in bed the narrator was initially a very compassionate person, however the conflict of war changed his views and priorities and he left one of his mates fry to die so that he couold save himself. he wouldn't have done that originally.

in general dies in bed, brown develops a quality that enables him to overlook the natural compassion that many human beings have. due to the war, brown tends to only think for himsela and only care for his wellbeing. an example of this is when brown takes the boots of the dead soldier. he doesnt care that it is wrong to steal from the fallen but he needs them boots to better himself. the war and it's condition him like this

will thornhill changed from nice guy to mean one after conflict with blacks

One conflict always contains the seeds of another

General Opinions/Ideas

- One conflict can contain other types of conflict within it.

-A conflict may contain one seed of other conflict but others may contain many of them.

For the prompt

- A war is a massive conflict in itself, however inside the war is the conflict of the different ranks and the individual men and woman in the war. A war may have started due to two world leaders fighting amongst themselves. This fight may have then escalated to a major war between the countries.

Against the Prompt

- Not all conflicts contain the seeds of another. Some conflicts may occur spontaneously due to an event that happened at that moment in time. For example, two best friends may have a fight due to something stupid one of them said to the other.

Three possible writing responses to the prompt

-A news article on the conflict about using nuclear power. This topic is a major issue in today's society. This conflict contains many seeds of other conflicts, such as the conflict that surrounds the accidents that happened at Chernobyl and Three Mile Island. Another seed of conflict that is within this issue is the cost and time that is needed to build a successful nuclear power plant. The target audience for this piece is young adults, adults and elderly people within society.

-An imaginative story that features conflicts that surround war and the effects it has on the individuals involved. The story could be a diary entry from a soldier in the war. By speaking through the voice of a war beaten soldier, the audience will be able understand and get that point that is trying to be conveyed. The target audience for this writing piece could be anyone from a Year 10 range to elderly.

-An expository piece on how conflict is a major part of everyday life and how many conflicts throughout our lives stem from previous conflicts in our lifetime. The target audience for this piece could be teenages through to elderly cizitens.

By Amanda Johnson and Sarah Cox =)









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SPEED DEBATES

During class you will have been presented with a variety of prompts and asked to debate them with your classmates. You will have considered the prompts from a positive and negative stance. Your job is to now:

1) type up and post the viewpoints and ideas generated from the debates
2) brainstorm three writing ideas for the prompt you ended up with. Explain the form, influence/s of the nominated set text and the ideas that inform your piece which are arising from the prompt and Context
3) read through the arguments and ideas for writing your classmates have posted and comment back with any further thoughts you have

Don’t be afraid of the Context section of the exam, use it as a chance to be inspired in your thinking; to explore, appreciate and challenge ways of looking at the world in regards to ‘encountering conflict’. Use expository, persuasive and/or imaginative writing forms as vehicles to convey your understanding of the implications of the prompt you are set. Within your piece employ ideas, themes and/or literary devices from your nominated text in some way, aim for these connections to be discernible. A key to doing the best that you can in the Context section is to write from points of interest; enjoy putting forward your point of view the way you do when chatting, having a friendly argument or making up a story to fool, scare, teach or humour someone.

Good Luck!!!